Writing the teaser page for a book is (for me) the hardest thing to do and get right, I’m sure it doesn’t help any when the book is 600 pages long with multiple threads and stories and an assortment of main characters to choose from – so this is one area I’ve called on for help, and who better to ask than the writing community I am in – You Guys (I know I haven’t given you a lot of time, but, as usual, I’m in a flaming hurry – my apologies to those who missed out, however the page is still there and your views will still be eagerly read).
A big Thank You, then, to Writingsprint for coming forward and being willing to evaluate my words and give fair and honest assessment. Writingsprint, I have decided to follow your advice on the first cover text and remove the final paragraph (although it doesn’t give away the ending, it does point to events that might be better unexpected).
Greg and I discussed it all in depth last night, looking at why the second two back covers work when the first does not, and taking Writingsprint’s assessment into account.
There are no spoilers over the page and no book quotes.
The second and third book teasers, I have decided to leave largely as is, with one or two tweaks. They are simple and to the point and feature the struggle or thoughts or attitude of a single character. That’s exactly what I need to do. The first one, however, points in many different directions and tries to fit an awful lot in.
Book 2 has a second story (I write double books, two stories intertwined), which doesn’t get a mention on the back at all.
The same with book 3. In many ways, the other story is the main one for book 3, but to mention it at all is a spoiler for the first two books in one form or another, so it’s better not mentioned (and Va’el’s story is equally important).
The first one, though, has no such constraints and I’ve tried to point to everything – Aleisha being psychic, the Khekarian/Chiddran war, Sturn being a Khekarian royal in exile and the hunt for the alien-natives, oh yes, and Raoul and Jackie, too – all of which can’t help but keep the back blurb for that book messy and cluttered.
A single character has to dominate and that character really has to be Aleisha.
So I shall go back to the drawing board (or writer’s desk in this case) and take another look and see if I can sharpen up the first few paragraphs once the end one is gone, or rework it completely. I shall most certainly let everyone have a look at the results.
Writingsprint, thank you again, you helped me more than you know.
Thank you, too, everyone for input on the warning label and for thoughts on the cover pictures.
Now it’s back to work for me. I have only four months to pull 400 pages out of somewhere, and it’s not going to happen while I’m cruising Blogsville.